Note: For some reason whenever I bring in my images, the blog preview when editing shows it can be clicked on to see a bigger version, but when I save/post it, it doesn't allow me to do that. So in the end you're only looking at the thumbnails. They're all medium images so i don't know why it's doing that. If someone could tip me that's a tecchy of this site, I'd appreciate the thought
These two, if y'all don't remember, were my two opposite characters I decided to draw. They were the two fawn sisters, Shaunna and Faya, Shaunna being the older and Faya the younger. I haven't made any changes to them at this time because I couldn't remember any critiques -if any- that I got on them. However, I definitely plan on using this as a reference and redoing a new one from scratch. If you all could tell me some key points to make this presentable in the portfolio, that'd be great. (in other words, "What should I put exactly?" )
Now y'all can actually see the colors right! lol Yes, these are my restaurant themed characters, the five characters with personalities, thus where Alburt the Butler Elphant was born! XD; I remember you all mentioning to me that Angella looked much too older for what she's supposed to be, and I can't remember the specifics on how to fix her, could yall remind me that please? XP So that concludes my characters cause we only did the two opposite characters, the five personalities, and the mid-term XP I've decided, and hope it's okay, not to post Lyla twice in my portfolio in the "character" section since you will already see her in the front cover of the portfolio. If someone says it otherwise, I will do so.
Same thing as the expressions below but with his 4-Point Turnaround. I also edited it slightly so we can actually see the width of his ears this time. Same thing again with Lyla and her turnaround. Then the only action poses were of our mid-term character, so that's covered already unless someone wants to give me advice on that. (the action poses/expressions on lyla)
Took the sketch of Alburt's expressions and converting everything into digitial, since that is my forte. What you see right now is very basic sketchyness, the final will be linearted, colored and toned. (shaded) Any tips? After him would be Lyla's expressions which I will blown up later
Our first background, and for me, my mexican restaurant. I know I definitely need to get rid of the border, add more tables, and more mexican decorative flare to the tables, and so on, so on ... I'm really tempted to get rid of the stairs all together cause obviously that's this case's problem, what do you all think? I will also say this ahead of time, if someone could help me with perspective, that'd be great cause I didn't think none of my items would cause a problem in perspective ... but apparently my couch in the right corner did? Help? (it's one of those love seat couches) Of course I can't post Lyla's background cause I don't have it with me ... so ... I think that's everything moreorless in order for the portfolio. Cheers! :3
Mexican Restaurant:
ReplyDeleteAlright Kat, I have to say I absolutely love this piece of art of yours. I know you already mentioned you need to get rid of the border add more Mexican flares to it and all that so I won't touch on that. To me though it seems too fancy to be a Mexican restaurant I'm not saying that there aren't fancy ones out there but yeah I just don't really know how to explain it except for the fact that it leans more towards those old fancy restaurants back in the like the late 50's or so with a band in the back and all that.
Expressions
I can't see the expression sheet, I think your scanner is just as strange as mine is lol
Turnaround:
I love this character and turn around of Albert. He's a beautiful character and honestly I don't really have anything to say about the turn around considering you edited it.
All characters in color:
Yep I can see the characters color pefectly and I have to see they are quite beautiful. I don't feel you need to edit anything of this.
Opposing Characters
All in all this is another strong piece of yours, it's not your mid term but its fairly nice and will fit in perfectly in with your portfolio. I just wish the background words were darker or typed so I can read it better. xD
Mid term
There is nothing I feel you need to change for your midterm. It's ready for your portfolio. xD
The Midterm: You're pretty much the only one so far who has actually made improvements, so kudos. I think the 'archaeologist' needs to be a little smaller, though - it almost reaches to the whip, and it just looks odd. Of course, I actually liked your handwriting better, too, because it fit with the whole 'whip'-ish feel of the logo. But since you were told to do away with it, I'd suggest putting the 'archaeologist' and 'treasure hunter' -under- the whip part that's under her name. Right now it just looks oddly placed - and out of place- , but I don't know what to tell you to fix that, except make your handwriting into a more legible font and use that. But that's something I wouldn't expect anyone to do, and hopefully someone else will have a better idea.
ReplyDeleteOpposite Characters: I'd really like to see this cleaned up and digital, because a) I'd like to see the background of colors completely gone and b) I'd like to see the writing a bit more spaced out and cohesive with the piece - right now it seems like doodles of thoughts.
Five Characters: Unfortunately I don't remember what ages your character were...so I can't help you. ): However, whatever it is, just research human age, and try to define what makes someone look old/young adult/adult/kid/etc, and try to apply that to her.
Elephant Turn-Around: I'd really like to see this spaced out with the magic of Photoshop/Sai. The overlapping was fine as a rough draft thing, but as a portfolio piece I feel that's a little too ghetto. Also, really go over the lines with a sure hand - everything looks a little shaky, almost like you were going for fur, but I'm pretty sure elephants don't have fur.
Elephant Emotions: Unfortunately it's too small to really see anything! Some of them look obvious just with the body language or extra bubbles (the drunk, the disappointed/sad, and the happy one in the middle are the only ones I can clearly tell).
Mexican Restaurant: You pretty much know what you need to do. Get rid of the border, and yes, I'd suggest getting completely rid of the stairs, and just making it a one-story fancy restaurant. Add more tables, too. And idk what Jen's talking about, because there are fancy mexican restaurants, and that's fine, you just need to make it a little more obvious that it's a mexican restaurant trying to be fancy by copying the styles of France/Europe/etc. Hard thing to do, but not impossible. I know Mr. Ruiz said don't rely on color, but if you do color it, that'll really help you out by making it loud obnoxious colors.
Midterm: I like it all typed up like this. :D It's so much cleaner! Now, one question though: is her name Llya or Lyla? P:
ReplyDeleteOpposite characters: I've seen what you've been doing anatomy wise lately and think your fauns would look awesome if you redid them in that taller style. :3 Just remember to make sure the differences between adult-ish and childlike proportions are clear and you'll be golden.
Lineup: For Angela I think her expression needed to be more playfully shy than reserved and mature. Her eyes might need to be bigger too. But other than that I think they look great! And I look forward to seeing them reprinted in the proper colors. :3
Turnaround: This looks much better now that it's all cleaned up! :D Maybe make it less squished together though? I know it's hard since you're working with an elephant, but maybe make it to where he isn't overlapping himself?
Expressions: Again, these look awesome cleaned up. :3 I just wish I could make the image bigger so I can see it better... >.< My computer is such a toddler tonight because of the rain.
Background: DEFINITELY color it. :3 Make it colorful and pretty so we can definitely get a flair for the Mexican culture. Add stucco texture to the walls too and of course mosaics! It's fancy and Mexican, so don't go shy on the detail (just make sure it's clean.) XD
really nice elephant turn around, def put some space between them all though.
ReplyDeletei think we all gave as much advice as possible on the room design. more tables less stairs. give it a little bit more of a restaurant feel and move some things around.
really great work on your midterm, i would work on the logo some more, but it was way better than mine hahaha!
nice job on the elephant emotions i would illustrate them and give them line weight!
always use line weight!